中考英语大常见错误解析（最新20篇）

导语：健康对一个人的生命是很重要的，下面是yuwenmi小编为大家整理的相关英语作文，欢迎阅读与借鉴，谢谢!

You can take away our money, house, car, or even our clothes and we can survive. But if our health was taken away, we would surely die. That is why we always try to eat in a healthy way and exercise regularly.

In order to eat healthily, I usually avoid eating food high in fat, like French fries or cookies. I also eat little meat. I eat a lot of vegetables and fresh fruit which are full of vitamins.Taking exercise every day helps us build a strong body. Regular exercise is an important part of keeping me healthy.Whats more, I think friends are an important part of ones health. Many studies show that people with a wide range of social contacts get sick less than those who dont. I always feel better when I am with friends than when I am alone. When I am with my friends, I always laugh. Laughing is also an important part of health. I like to laugh with my friends.

By eating properly and exercising regularly, I can keep my body at a proper weight and keep healthy. By spending time with my friends, I can keep my mind as well as my body happy. these things sound easy to do, but not many people can manage them. I think a strong will is necessary if we want to keep healthy.

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你可以拿走我们的钱，房子，汽车，甚至我们的衣服，我们可以生存。但是，如果我们的健康被带走，我们一定会死。这就是为什么我们总是尝试吃健康的方式和定期锻炼。

为了健康饮食，我通常避免吃高脂肪食物，如薯条或饼干。我也吃很少的肉。我吃很多蔬菜和新鲜的水果，富含维生素。每天锻炼有助于我们强健体魄。经常锻炼是保持健康的重要组成部分，而且我认为朋友是健康的重要组成部分。许多研究表明，社会接触广泛的人比不喜欢的人生病少。当我和朋友在一起的时候，我总是感觉比独自一人好。当我和朋友在一起的时候，我总是笑。笑也是健康的重要组成部分。我喜欢和我的朋友一起笑。

通过适当的饮食和经常锻炼，我可以保持我的身体在适当的体重和保持健康。花时间和朋友在一起，我可以保持我的身心健康。这些事情听起来容易做，但没有多少人可以管理他们。我认为坚强的意志是必要的，如果我们想保持健康。

You are writing a complaint to the manager about the hotel.

题目：你向饭店经理写信投诉酒店服务。

(以e-mail的形式出现)

On the whole, my stay here was satisfactory. The hotel was comfortable and the room was bright, but it was too dirty. Whats more the food was compeletely awful and the service was really terrible. I have stayed in your hotel for several times and everything is getting worse, though the price is fair.

总体而言，我在这边住得比较满意。酒店很舒服，房间也很明亮，但是太脏了。另外，这儿的食物太糟糕了，服务也很差。我已经在这里住过好几次了，虽然价钱还不错，但每件事都越来越糟糕。

Please try to clean the room a bit more often and find someone who is capable of cooking and who knows how to talk friendly to others.

请时常打扫一下房间，找个真正懂烹饪的和懂得跟别人和睦相处的员工!

Mid-autumn day is a special festival in China, which is one of the

traditional Chinese festivals. Itfalls on the 15th day of august lunar month

every year. Our Chinese will celebrate it on that day. I think there are not too

many people can reject he temptation of it. I like this festival very much. I

have two reasons.

First of all, mid-autumn has the deep meaning of reunite. In china, people

regard mid-autumn day as very important, so no matter where they are, they will

come back to their family if there is a chance. They don’t like celebrate this

festival outside, which will make them feel lonely. Thus, they will go home by

all means. Luckily, the government also pays great attention to this traditional

festival. There are laws to make sure people have holidays in that special day.

In the other word, mid-autumn festival gives a chance for family get

together.

Secondly, every family will prepare a big meal in that day. All the food is

delicious. It is good to have a big meal. I think nobody will not interest in

delicious food. The mooncake is a necessary decoration for mid-autumn day. It

tastes good, too. It is the traditional for a long time. How pleased to enjoy

the glorious full moon with mooncake!

This is why I love mid-autumn festival so much. It is funny and happy

time.

Its almost the end of April. Summer has come to us in my city. In south,

summer always comes earlier than north. It has been hot for about half a month.

The highest temperature reached 37 degree. Now, there are much less people in

the street. People are not likely to go out during the summer. Its so hot

outside. Swimming is the most favorite activity in my city. The pools are always

full filled with people. Parents often take their children to swimming pool at

night. Personally, I do not like summer, because its too hot and the sunshine

is strong. I sweat a lot and that makes me very uncomfortable. Therefore, summer

is tough time for me and I always expect winter to come.

出色的明星成就于好习惯”

韩庚，一个众所周知的名字，在亚洲国际舞台上闪耀着灿烂的光芒，他能歌善舞，给人以美的享受;帅气的动作，给人留下难忘的印象。他19岁是便背井离乡，外出谋生。进过多年的拼搏，终于闯出一片碧海蓝天。他成功了，但成功的背后总少不了艰辛与汗水。那么他是怎样走向成功的呢?这跟他平时的好习惯密不可分。他是队里排练最认真的成员，每天都会比其他成员多花几个小时的时间来练习。即使他身体不适，也会坚持练习，总是把最好的一面展示给大家。作为歌手，韩庚尽量满足歌迷提出的合理要求，从不摆明星架子。每一次演出后，韩庚都会带着队里的成员把录像带看上好几遍，互相讨论，取长补短。同时，韩庚也是一个勤俭节约的人，在公司的食堂里从不浪费，吃多少点多少。所以说，明星、偶像并不是高不可攀，只要我们向他们学习，做好身边的每一件事，养成好习惯，一定会成就我们的大梦想!

孔子勤学三绝竹简

孔子从小就养成勤奋好学的习惯，随着多年的游学奔波，他的习惯并没有改变，学习反而愈加勤奋。晚年，他得到一部用当时已不多见的古文字写成的《易经》，他认真仔细地读了一遍又一遍，从基本上掌握书的内容，到对书的内容有了较深刻的理解，最后他完全领会了其中的真谛。以后，孔子又多次认真地读它，以至串连竹简的牛皮带子都磨断过多次。这就是成语“韦编三绝”的来历。

颜真卿养成好习惯

颜真卿开始练书法时总是静不下心，总想能走点捷径。他慕名到当时的大书法家张旭那里学习，张旭的草书在当时是一绝。颜真卿希望得到名师的指点，可是投师半年多，他很少得到张旭的直接指教，张旭只是把前代名帖和自己写的字交给颜真卿临摹，要他反复揣摩，“倍加工学”，要他多观察大千世界、领悟自然万象，从中寻求艺术上的启示。对这样的教法颜真卿颇感失望，于是请求张旭尽快传授妙诀秘方给他。张旭听后耐着性子开导颜真卿，除了养成苦学的习惯，没有什么诀窍。颜真卿听了老师的话，经过认真的思考，终于明白为学之道。从此，他不再妄求成功的捷径，勤学苦练，终于成为一代大书法家。

钟声嘀哒嘀哒地响着，指针艰涩地走着，我坐在教室里，进行着本学期的第一次月考。以窗外为题，写一篇作文看到这个题目，我就纳闷了，窗外，有什么呢？

我看向窗外，陷入了沉思

窗外有一张古老的石椅，一条条的裂痕，仿佛历经沧桑。记得我曾于一个同学坐在这张石椅上看书，我们悠闲地背对背，脚也抬了上来。那时候，石椅仿佛就是我们的全世界，与世隔绝，有无丝竹之乱耳，无案牍之劳形之感。

窗外有一盏路灯，稳重的样子给人以踏实的感觉。曾几何时，到了一天的尽头，迈着沉重的脚步，在发出昏暗亮光路灯的陪伴下，我走向宿舍。那时，路灯就像一个母亲，静静地陪在孩子身边，给他温暖和支持。

窗外有一棵大树，不知道年龄，只可以看到它高大的身子，茂密的树叶和零散的分支。我曾摔倒在这大树旁，扶着它有力的支干，我站了起来，它像一个庄严的父亲，教给我坚强，给予我力量。

窗外有一条窄窄的小路，落叶铺在小路上，给粗糙的地面增添了几分柔软。有一个下雨天，我跑在这路上，脚下的落叶让我多了几分奔跑的热情，渐渐地，我也感觉不到雨水的冰冷了，内心竟多了几分温暖。小路在无形中似乎给了我温暖和活力。

窗外还有一条文化长廊，那里有被表彰的名字，我的名字也在上面，它似乎在肯定我，支持我和赞扬我，我仿佛看到它向我微微的点头。它让我充满了向上的动力。

窗外的世界真精彩，这里的一切都给我美好的回忆，每一样物品仿佛都在诉说着自己生命的价值！

Two secondary school teachers I remember show how different people can be though engaged in the same profession.

中学二级教师我记得如何不同的人虽然可以从事相同的职业。

Mrs. Wang, my philosophy teacher, sent us to sleep less than ten minutes when she started talking in class. When a head nodded, she would point at the dozing student and made threatening remarks. She said that she was bored teaching us. Some students in her eyes had no desire to learn. But the other teacher Mr. Li always had bright eyes in a smiling face and encouraging words which showed that he loved Chinese history he was teaching and wanted us to love it too.

王太太，我的哲学老师，给我们的睡眠时间少于十分钟的时候，她开始在课堂上说话。当一头点了点头，她会在打瞌睡的学生和威胁的话。她说，她厌倦了我们的教学。在她的眼睛里有些学生没有学习的欲望。但是，李老师总是有明亮的眼睛在微笑和鼓励的话表明他爱中国历史上他是教学要我们太爱它。

When it came to their attitudes to their students, they were different too. After Mrs. Wang finished her day`s lessens she felt that she had finished her job. Once when I asked her a question outside class about a term, she continued with preparation to leave and said that I could bring my question to class next week. Before I knew it she had put her keys into her handbag and walked out of the door. In the history class, however, a question even after the bell would still be given attention to by Mr. Li. He would rush to the board in a last minute attempt to clear up. Often he was seen with a number of students standing outside the classroom, discussing the day`s assignment.

当它来到他们的态度，他们的学生，他们是不同的。王太太完成她的天`后使她觉得她已经完成了她的工作。当我问她有关的术语类之外的一个问题，她继续准备离开，说我可以带我的问题下周上课。我知道她已经把她的钥匙在手提包，走出门前。然而在历史课，甚至，铃响后一个问题仍然会关注由李先生。他会冲到董事会在最后一分钟尝试清理。他经常看到许多学生站在教室外面，讨论一天的任务`。

Their methods of teaching were not like as well. Mrs. Wang stuck to the textbook and trained us how to memorize minute facts. However Mr. Li brought in films, maps, slides, tapes, anything that would help us learn. Once the whole class went to see the `film Lin Zexu` in order to better understand the history of the Opium War from 1840 to 1842.

他们的教学方法是不一样好。王太太在教科书和训练我们如何记住分钟的事实。但是李先生带来了电影，地图，幻灯片，录像带，任何能帮助我们学习。一旦整个班去为了更好地理解鸦片战争的历史，从1840到1842到`电影林则徐`。

Owing to these contrasts, I do not think I can forget either of my past teachers.

由于这些对比，我不认为我能忘记我过去的老师。

成也萧何，败也萧何

西汉的萧何是汉高祖刘邦的重要谋臣。他曾向刘邦推荐了善于用兵打仗的韩信做大将军，使之为汉朝的建立立下很大功劳。后来有人向刘邦的妻子吕后告发韩信谋反。吕后想把韩信召进宫来，又怕他不肯就范，就同萧何商议。萧何设计以庆贺平叛胜利为理由，骗韩信进宫。韩信一进宫，就被吕后以谋反罪名杀于长乐宫钟室。民间因此有“成也萧何(韩信成为大将军是萧何推荐的)，败也萧何(韩信被杀是萧何出的`计谋)”的说法。

成也萧何，败也萧何比喻事情的成败、好坏都由一个人造成。

I imagine a lot about lives in the future. I think two words can summarize

my imagination. The first word is fast. In the future, we will have more quickly

transportation means. Now matter how far we go, it takes only a short time. With

the development of science and technology, we can travel to the moon, Mars or

somewhere outer space. People may can live in other planets. The second word is

convenient. Because of the fast development of our society, many work can be

done by computers or even robots. Lots of things are fully automated. Humans

just need to give some simple instructions to complete complecated tasks.

I love reading, which enriches my knowledge and helps me know more about

the world. I love the school atmosphere. Students study together here and make

progress gradually. My favorite place here is library. I can read many books

here. Once I have some questions, I can find a lot of information. We fight for

the goal and plan details in the library in group task. I have so many good

memories to study here, which makes me so happy. No matter which school I am in,

I will always find this quiet corner and study what I like. I love the feelings

there.

On May 12, 2008, there was an earthquake happened in Wenchuan, Sichuan

province. More than 69000 people had lost their lives, 374643 people had injured

and 17923 people could not be found in this earthquake. After the earthquake had

happened, people from all the field joined the rescue teams. At that moment,

people only care about one thing, that was to save more people from this

disaster and encourage the injure to be strong. After seven day, the chairman

declared that May 19 is the national day of mourning. Flags were at half-mast

everywhere on the day of mourning for victims of Wenchuan earthquake.

The mourning day is to remember the people who lost their lives in the

earthquake, on one hand, is to remind people do not forget that day, don’t

forget about the past and look into the future; on the other hand, is to

encourage the survivers to stay strong. Life is worth living for.

Although Earthquake had destroyed our home, but we can build a brand-new

one. We can rebuild our hope. Just as Nixon said so, our destiny offers not the

cup of despair, but the chalice of opportunity. So let us seize it, not in fear,

but in gladness. Just have a little faith. Just try to remember that everything

will be alright. We will find what we are looking for in the future.

一篇文章通常由开头、正文内容和结尾三个部分构成。的名师表示，这三个部分的比例安排要合理，只有合理的文章构成，才能拿到令人满意的分数。

文章的开头一般来说应尽量做到开门见山，用简单明白的叙述引出文章的话题，使读者了解文章要谈论什么，一下于引起读者的兴趣。

作文常见的开头形式大致有以下几种：

1、直叙主题开门见山

文章一开头就交待清楚文章的主题是什么。如“How I Spent My Vacation”(我怎样度假)的开头是：

I Spent my last vacation happily.

下面是题为“Honesty”(谈诚实)一文中的开头：

Honesty is one of the best virtues.An honest man is always trusted and respected.On the contrary, one who tells lies is regarded as a "liar",and is looked upon by honest people.

2、交代文章背景开头

在文章的开头，先把人物、事件和环境交待清楚。例如“A Trip to Jinshan” (去金山旅游)的开头：

The day before yesterday my class went on a bus trip to Jinshan. The bus ride there took three hours. The long trip made us very tired, but the sight of the beautiful sea refreshed us.

3、 以回忆来开头

用回忆的方法来开头。例如“A Trip to the Taishan Mountain”(泰山游)的开头是：

I remember my first trip to the Taishan Mountain as if it were yesterday.

4、以概括的方式来开头

即对要在文章中叙述的人或事先作一个概括性的介绍。如“The Happiness of Reading Books”(读书的快乐)的开头：

People often say that gold and silver are the most valuable things in the world. But I say that to read books is more valuable than anything else, because books give us knowledge and knowledge gives us power.

5、铺垫环境来开头

即开头利用自然景物或自然环境引出要介绍的事物。如“An Accident”(一场事故)的开头是:

It was a rainy and windy morning. The sky was gloomy, the temperature was low, and the street was nearly empty. I was on my way back to school. Suddenly, a speeding car came round the corner.

6、表述目的来开头。

在文章的一开头就交待写作目的，如通过文章要表扬谁，批评谁，或说明一个什么问题等。如“Pollution Control”(控制污染)的开头：

In this article I shall draw your attention to the subject of pollution control.

以上就是中考英语作文满分、高分分段的同学常使用的几种开头方式，您也可以依据自身的习惯来挑选适合自己的开头方式。不论用什么开头，目的都只有一个，那就是取得高分。

This morning, my father took me to school by bike. I sat at the back of the bike, eating abanana. After I ate it up, I threw the skin onto the street randomly. No sooner had I done thisthan I realized that I had done something bad to our environment. And maybe someone wouldstep on it and tumbleover. I must pick it up. Thinking of these, I asked father to stop. I jumpedoffthe bike and ran back to pick up the banana skin and threw it into a roadside dustbin. Seeingthis, father praised me and I felt very happy.

In future I will protect the surroundings more consciously and think more about others.

上学路上

今天早晨，爸爸骑车带我去上学。我坐在后车座上，吃着香蕉。吃完后，我顺手将香蕉皮扔到了街上。我马上意识到我的所作所为破坏了我们的环境，或许有人会踩在上面而跌倒，我必须把它拾起来。想到这些，我让爸爸停车。我跳下自行车，跑回去拾起香蕉皮，并扔到了路边的垃圾箱里。看到这些，爸爸表扬了我。我感到很高兴。

将来我要更自觉地保护周围的环境，更多地为他人着想。

The giant panda is a national treasure in our country, they are very cute.

Recently, I came to the hometown of giant pandas, chengdu panda base to

visit.

Entered the panda base, I saw the "fog" from the side of the hearth, and

likely to increase humidity. Then, I found the bamboo on both sides of the tilt

to the middle, formed a huge "arch bridge", for tourists to enjoy. Then, we came

to the giant panda museum. We first watched on giant panda breeding and so on

video, then, I started to play the game here: imitation of giant pandas, find

the bride for the panda, and so on.

Then, we came to the giant panda "villa" : every panda about 15 square

meters of the "indoor residential" and several "outdoor garden" the size of the

sitting room. They sometimes along the garden wooden posts climbed several

meters high rack, the crawling around on it. In indoor, they often walk around

the glass window, as if to show people it lovely side. Then he will be picked up

in the middle of the bamboo, taste with relish.

We will go forward, then came to the young giant panda base. You dont call

them "panda". Because the red panda is another panda. Head I thought I would see

a big, white and black giant pandas, youth didnt see the size of a mouse pink

"pig". Afterwards just know, the giant panda cub is these furry little one. I

came to another room, suddenly found the young pandas here head is much bigger

than before, and also has become a black and white. It is hard to imagine but

larger than the "pig", less than a month of young giant pandas.

Finally, we arrived at the panda. But they are many only live together. The

panda brown and white, very lovely. The panda and the giant panda is not the

same, however, gave birth to have had the bright colors.

Chengdu panda base is the panda "shelter", care and concern every

panda.

第一招：审题细心。审题好比驾驶员打方向，方向对了，哪怕开得慢点，也会顺利到目的地。如果审题不清，书面表达的成绩不知道会有多惨。学生真正开始写作 前，必须花相当一部分时间做写前阅读、思考等准备，包含以下四方面：1)审体裁。根据情景提示首先要弄清写何种体裁文章。2)审结构。明确开始部分、正文 部分和结尾部分，定好段落。3)审格式。如日记、便条、书信、通知的格式等。4)审内容。弄清什么必需写，哪些略写，尤其是图画式书面表达，要学会连贯 性，读懂图的意思。5)审人称和时态。弄清书面表达要求用何种人称，根据材料确定短文的基本时态。

第二招：衔接流畅。恰当使用逻辑词语，使各要点间连贯，行文通顺。比如表并列或递进： and, both…and, neither…nor, not only…but also;表选择：or, either…or; 表转折或让步：but, although, though, however, even though, in spite of, on the contrary; 表对比：like, unlike, while; 表举例：for example, such as, that’s to say; 表强调：in fact, of course, besides; 表时间顺序：when, after, before, as soon as, soon after; 表因果关系：because, since, as, for, for this reason，as a result; 表结论：in a word, to sum up. In summary, in conclusion, on the whole;

第三招：短语地道。如果能多用短语，则可回避书面表达中的中式英语，同时也能减少错误几率。尤其在考试时，如果使用短语，会使文章增加亮点。

第四招：句式丰富。一篇可读性强的文章，通常能较好体现学生对英语语言结构、词块、句式的运用。因此各类句式的多元呈现往往可以提升书面表达的成绩。初中 阶段英语写作常用的句式如下：There be…；the more…the more…；It’s adj for sb to do something；I think/believe/suppose…(宾从)； It can’t be put into real experiment。(被动)等。尤其是复合句的适恰运用对提升文章的层次很有帮助。对大多数同学来说，仿写很重要，在教材和很多的阅读书籍中都蕴含着 丰富的好词佳句。

第五招：情感真实。同样的话题，有些文章没什么情感，冷冰冰；有些 文章很有温度，有真情实感。情感真实主要可通过如下方法实现：1)内容的呈现。比如：2012年的中考英语书面表达My dream，大部分的作文都还是停留在表面上。但这个例子：I want to be a good father because my daddy was always so busy when I was a little boy.He had no time with me and my mum…虽然文章的文采并不是很好，但很有真情实感，令读者有心动的感觉，也是好文章。2)副词的运用。在句子的某些位置，添加副词，可以使句子和文段更 有人性味，更有情感性。如：I really enjoy the beauty of the sea in the sun。加了一个really，就有味道了。

第六招：思维多元。从杭州近五年中考书 面表达命题情况看，书面表达话题虽多元，但在设题上基本为半开放形式，因此半控制部分学生需要涵盖题目所给信息并进行适当发挥，而半开放部分，则要求学生 根据话题内容、自己的生活阅历、个人思维层次结合自己的英语表述自己的个人看法。有些学生的英语水平比较好，但因为在思维上比较局限想不出比较有深度、宽 度和广度的观点，这也会在一定程度上约束书面表达的质量。

第七招：整理独到。进入八 年级以来，在平时写作、单元练习、期中期末考试中，考生已积累了一定量与教材同话题的自己写的英语小短文，建议在临考前的最后阶段把自己八年级以来写的不 同话题的文章进行修改，润色、整理、汇编成册，制作一本个性化私人定制的“书面表达秘籍”，以备中考前高效复习用，以不变应万变。

第八招：卷面美观。1)不做涂改。需要在平时的书面表达中养成简列提纲、打草稿，再誊抄到答题卡的习惯。2)及时补救。如果对答题卡上的书面表达有修改， 建议用斜线划掉相应部分。3)勤练规范。临考前一个月，以中考答题卡的行距和长度为参照，设计自己字的大小，字的间距，每行的字数，以看起来舒服为准。

i am always busy with my lessons. what i have to do everyday is nothing but study.

luckily, last summer my family went to my uncles farm.we enjoyed a really interesting holiday. during the holiday, i didnt have to get up early, nor did i need to finish many exercises.

i rode the horse in the fields. i milked the cows on the farm. to my great joy, my uncle invited me to go fishing. life on the farm is quite different from that at school. i want to go back to spend my summer holiday again.

What is the purpose of students studying hard all these years, of course

for the better future. Every parent wants their kids have advantage over others,

so they can be outstanding and have a good job. Students learn in campus, they

are in the stage of studying knowledge while getting a job soon, there is

necessary for them knowing something about society.

Before study in college, students focus all their attention on study for

entering a good college, they don’t need to care about other things, it is also

what their parents tell them. After entering college, it is a little different,

at this stage, study is no more the only task, students should have access to

society. They should make some preparation for the job hunting, knowing society

helps them get use to the society quickly. Some students only care about score,

when they find a job, the employer will ask him something about the public news,

but students have no idea, this is so bad. What’s more, getting familiar with

the society makes students find their own positions, they will know what they

want and fight for it.

The atmosphere of society is very different from campus, in order to better

adjust to finding a job, students should get to know society.

亡羊补牢

【典故】

这故事出自“战国策”。战国时代，楚国有一个大臣，名叫庄辛，有一天对楚襄王说： “你在宫里面的时候，左边是州侯，右边是夏侯;出去的时候，鄢陵君和寿跟君又总是随看你。你和这四个人专门讲究奢侈淫乐，不管国家大事，郢(楚都，在今湖北省江陵县北)一定要危险啦!”

襄王听了，很不高兴，生气骂道：“你老糊涂了吗?故意说这些险恶的话惑乱人心吗?”

庄辛不慌不忙的回答说：“我实在感觉事情一定要到这个地步的，不敢故意说楚国有什么不幸。 如果你一直宠信这个人，楚国一定要灭亡的。你既然不信我的话，请允许我到赵国躲一躲，看事情究竟会怎样。” 庄辛到赵国才住了五个月，秦国果然派兵侵楚，襄王被迫流亡到阳城(今河南息县西北)。这才觉得庄辛的话不错，赶紧派人把庄辛找回来，问他有什么办法;庄辛很诚恳地说：“我听说过，看见兔子牙想起猎犬，这还不晚;羊跑掉了才补羊圈，也还不迟。……”

【释读】

这是一则很有意义的故事，只知道享乐，不知道如何做事，其结果必然是遭到悲惨的失败无疑。

“亡羊补牢”这句成语，便是根据上面约两句话而来的，表达处理事情发生错误以后，如果赶紧去挽救，还不为迟的意思。例如一个事业家，因估计事情的发展犯了错误，轻举冒进，陷入失败的境地。但他并不气馁，耐心地将事情再想了一遍，从这次的错误中吸取教训，认为“亡羊补牢”，从头做起，还不算晚呢!

科场上，看到作文标题，我的思路又回到了那节让我影象深刻的语文课上。

上课铃刚打，讲堂里就嘈杂起来。同窗们求助地默背昨天学的《我爱这土地》。我一边背一边求助地看着门口，祷告着先生晚点来到。

这时，语文先生踏进讲堂，我内心求助到顶点：“完了，本日早上背的全忘光了……要是一会提问就惨了……”

先生清了清嗓子，各人背诵的声音停了下来。果不其然，先生说：“下面搜查课文背诵。”他锐利的眼神混合着些许勉励扫视全班，讲堂里阒寂无声，比上自习时还要静。我偷偷瞅了瞅周围，各人的头都快低到桌子上了，求助地看着册本。先生又溘然来了句：“本日背诵，由同窗们提问我。”

我们的头在一刹时都抬了起来，眼睛齐刷刷地投向先生，都丈二僧人——摸不着脑子。我把疑问的眼神投向同位，她小声说：“先生葫芦里卖的什么药呀?”

先生接着说：“背诵一向是同窗们的一个难关，本日晨读时有个同窗问我，先生老是要求同窗们背诵，本身会不会背?我溘然意识到，要让同窗们背会，起首先生要做出榜样，以是，我抉择这节课由我背诵。”

我们即刻兴焕发来，当真看着讲义，搜查先生背诵时有没有错误。

“若是我是一只鸟/我也应该用沙哑的喉咙称赞……”先生富于韵味的声音回荡于讲堂，我们被带入一个极新的诗歌天下中。这个天下里有墨客对故国深沉的爱，有对侵犯者切齿的恨，有对处于日本铁蹄践踏下故国深沉的爱，有为国献身的热情……

先生背完，我们都还陶醉在声情并茂的背诵中，稍后，讲堂响起了雷鸣般的掌声。先生脸上绽铺开恬静的微笑。此时，室外，风儿沙沙，鸟儿啾啾。

这就是我最喜好的一堂语文课。

随着社会的发展，人们的生活越来越好，可是有些事情却让我们既高兴，又发愁。高兴的是科技很发达，为我们人类带来了很多方便。发愁的是生活的节奏越来越快，大家既要忙事业，又想把生活过好，这可怎么办呢？

这时我就想，假如有个智能机器人能无私的帮助我们就好了。比如当你辛苦了一天回到家时，只要说一声：“芝麻开门。”门就开了；当你走进门，它会主动地帮你把拖鞋拿来；当你走到饭桌前，它会帮你准备一桌香喷喷的、可口的饭菜；当你吃完饭，它还会帮你刷碗、扫地、拖地；当你睡觉时，它就坐在你旁边给你讲故事、唱歌，让你进入梦乡，而起床后，它又会给你做早餐、叠被子；当你要出去游玩时，就会给你变出一双洁白的翅膀，带着你环游整个世界。你是不是也很想拥有一个这么体贴的帮手呢？

我还想，如果有一个会说话的果皮箱，那就好上加好。当它看见你要把垃圾丢到地上时，它就会说：“别乱丢，别乱丢，快快丢到我嘴里！”就在这时，你可能会说：“关你什么事！我愿意往哪丢就往哪丢！”它就会和蔼地对你说：“我让你把垃圾丢到我嘴里，是因为这样做对环境卫生有很大的好处。所以我让你把垃圾丢到我嘴里。”听了这番话，你可能会不好意思地低下了头，说：“谢谢你提醒我，不然我就要破坏环境卫生了！”说后，就会把垃圾丢到它嘴里。瞧！这样我们的环境多干净啊。

科技使我们的生活更加美好，更加方便，更加舒适。我相信，现代科学技术必将继续创造一个个奇迹，不断改善我们的生活。

成长见证坚持的可贵

1.雏鹰坚持挥动双翼，搏击长空，才最终成长，迎接风浪；花苞坚持屹立于风霜欺凌之中，才最终盛开，满院飘香。我因坚持而成长，而成长同时见证了坚持的可贵，它助我培养钢铁意志，助我学会奉献他人，创造辉煌。

开篇各种点题

开篇巧妙：整齐句式开头，可套用

选材精妙

2. “课代表，”老师叫我，“从明天起每周二、周四的数学早读就让你布置了，每次写几道题，好好干啊!”我看着老师洋溢着期待的笑容，点了点头，心中暗暗决定，一定要让我布置的早读令人刮目相看!

设置事件

3.然而毕竟是初一的小孩子。初时的新鲜感与热血沸腾一消失，便只余下内心的苍白与酸涩，还有些怨念——凭什么我要每天来得那么早，凭什么我要每天在厚重的书中翻题。同学有些不满的声音传入我耳中：“今天的题怎么这么简单？”“那个圆谁画得那么难看？”我压抑住拍书走人或冲他们怒吼的念头，手指间白色的粉笔灰落得一片狼藉。于是我便似乎忘掉了当初的重誓，不再坚持，再在黑板上勾画时便失去了以往的认真，愈加漫不经心起来。 磨难出现

心理描写是亮点，可套用

4.连着几期糟糕至极的早读过后，老师对我忍无可忍，“怎么回事？”她黑着脸，开始告诉我上任数学课代表安排如何井井有条，答题如何热情高涨。我看着班中的冷清和众人纷纭的目光，低下头，竭力不让泪水滚落。然而心中呼啸着穿过的念头却愈加强烈——这一切都是你的错，你应该坚持，履行你的诺言。我红着眼圈羞愧地坐了下去，那个誓言又扎根于我的脑海中，再也不会离开。

意识到问题，选择勇敢面对

5.时光一点点流逝，而晚上的我总会在台灯下认真翻动着纸页，寻找合适的题。那些灵巧的精灵却总在书页间捉着迷藏，捕捉到的瞬间使我有柳暗花明的感觉；清晨的我不论风雨总会早早来到学校，在空旷教室中用粉笔一笔一画书写昨夜的辛劳成果，简洁的几何图形稚嫩而有失“分寸”，却是我竭力描绘的结晶。不知多少次在听到同学批评或看他们无精打采样子时隐藏住夺眶的泪水，不知多少次在家长训斥着太过认真时低下头却依旧让誓言雄壮的旋律在心中回荡。我清晰地窥见自己的成长——从漫不经心，连声抱怨到全心投入编织自己的梦想、奉献，坚持使我成长，而成长见证坚持的可贵。

付诸实践，坚持到底

6.班中的气氛悄然发生着变化。议论的声音降低至无，早来的同学使我由独干变为群干，而老师的脸上也逐渐恢复了以往的笑容。身边孤单冷寂的感觉已消失不见，阳光再次洒在我飞扬的嘴角上，见证着我的坚持、成长与辉煌。

行动见成效，行文中呼应文题

7.坚持是冲过终点的几步，坚持是迈向光明的希望。两年风雨路，我曾坚韧地走过。成长见证了坚持的可贵，而我，带着从坚持中磨练的钢铁意志与奉献精神，再度扬帆起航。在成长中学会的坚持，是我得到的最宝贵的礼物，我将携它攻克一个个难关，走向辉煌 升华主题，扣题，首尾呼应

日积月累

花朵的绽放，不是因春日短暂的温暖，而是因严冬的洗礼，夏、秋的积蓄，所以在春天，它会开放，展现风采。

——题记

开篇运用题记

题记呼应文题：积蓄≈日积月累

1.又是一年春好处，下过了几场春雨，院子里的玉兰花总算开出了满满一树的花朵。白中透着黄，他们张开花瓣，顽皮地吐出花蕊。

2.大考过后，我举着成绩单沾沾自喜，就连步子也轻飘飘的，在草地上蹦跳着。我面对满树的花，开心的笑了。

环境描写开头，空间大，展现语言表达，烘托心理

引出事件

3.日子好似匆匆划过，转眼已是入冬，过去几个月的快乐和满足却被一张刺眼的成绩单打散了。我眼巴巴地盯着下降的名次，心中一阵阵不安，真像是被什么人打了一巴掌，我竟真的有些不知所措了。回家路上，我无力地摇摆着双臂，“究竟错了什么？”我问自己但却没有答案。

事件起波澜，往日风采不见

4.回到家，爸爸得知成绩后没有多说什么，只是在一天闲暇时，领我去了那玉兰的围栏边。“你看它。”我不解的走近，摆弄枝干，却没有什么意外收获。爸爸仔细拉过一根枝，认真地说：“你看，这干枯的皮里是绿莹莹的。”他起身对我说，“没有开花时，它也在生长，只有这样，才能在第二年继续开花啊。”我先是一愣，后才又有所思索，想象玉兰在开花过后依然努力汲取养分，精心保护着枝干。

“他人”、“景物”出现

促使思考：所处境地

5.我回到家，面对枯燥的书本又努力学习起来，像找到昔日的感觉，那是玉兰花开时的感觉。我知道，日积月累的努力才能造就成功。我苦心翻阅资料，认真记忆。就这样，窗外那只玉兰陪我度过了一个严冬，一个对我意义深刻的严冬。

悟出道理，付诸行动

6.又是春天，我的努力也终于化作一张笑脸，我为进步而喜，同时又为玉兰花而喜。它又开了，雪白的花中染了几点淡黄，一朵朵像孩子调皮的脸颊，像少女轻柔的裙边，像月夜明澈的弯月，清风裹挟来一阵阵淡淡的香，也许它在笑吧，我这样想。

何为日积月累？行文把控能力超强，转眼又到春天

7.远望它，静静伫立在青葱的草坪上，微笑着开放。它告诉人们，只有日积月累的努力才能造就成功。

扣题：拟人修辞

8.我听到了，并且深有体会，从我的书本上，那些笔尖触过的痕迹，纸张微黄的边角上，早已印证了这个道理。

升华主题，语言优美